This is how I could revise a sentence to make it better.
The bunne is in the bushes edit
The bunny is in the bushes.
revise and edit The scared bunny is in the bushes!
revise The really scared brown bunny is hiding behind the bushes! revise
The shiveringand shaking,fluffy, brown bunny is concealedwithin the purple prickly bushes. revise Is the shivering and
shaking, shaggy, dark brown
rabbit concealed within the enormous purple berried prickly bushes?
Final Copy Today I saw a shivering and shaking, shaggy, dark brown
bunny rabbit concealed within the enormously gigantic purple berried prickly