Revise



Rewrite parts of the story to make it better.

This is how I could revise a sentence to make it better.

Example
The bunne is in the bushes
edit
The bunny is in the bushes.
revise and edit
The scared bunny is in the bushes!
revise
The really scared brown bunny is hiding behind the bushes!
revise
The shivering and shaking,  fluffy, brown bunny is concealed within the  purple prickly bushes.
revise
Is the shivering and shaking, shaggy, dark brown  bunny rabbit concealed within the enormous purple berried prickly bushes?

Final Copy
Today I saw a  shivering and shaking, shaggy, dark brown bunny rabbit concealed within the enormously gigantic purple berried prickly bushes!!!



Links


http://www.unc.edu/depts/wcweb/handouts/revision.html

http://www.angelfire.com/wi/writingprocess/revising.html

http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/revise

http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/revise

http://owl.english.purdue.edu/workshops/hypertext/ResearchW/revise.html

http://www.rpi.edu/web/writingcenter/revise.html